1. In 1288,the Ottoman Empire was founded by the warrior Osman.
2. In 1453,Constantinople was conquered by Sultan Sulaiman the Magnificent.
3. The time between 1520-1566 was the golden age of the Ottoman Empire.
4. From 1683-1697 a war between Austria and the Ottoman Empire took place, and the Ottomans won.
5.From 1682-1785 Peter the Great introduced a Turkish-Russian competition.
6. In 1854 the Crimean war took place and Tsar Nicholas moved troops into Romania.
7. In 1909 Abul Hamid, the last of the Ottoman Sultans, is removed from power.
8. From 1914-1918, Turkey allies with Germany in the First World War.
9. From 1939-1945, Turkey remained neutral during the Second World War.
10. On May 27, 1960 General Cemal Attaturk led a military coup to remove president Jalal and prime minister Menderes.
11. In 1974, under prime minister Esent, Turkey invaded Cypress.
12.In 1980, a military coup under General Kenan Evreen took place.
13. In 1985, the government established a paramilitary milita to fight Kurdish terrorist groups.
14. In July 1987, the southeast went under emergency legislation which lasted until 2002.
15. In 1997 the government issued a memorandum against religious laws in Turkey.

Subjective: History of Turkey
1. In 1288, the great Ottoman Empire earlier founded by the strong warrior Osman.
2. In 1453, big Constantinople sadly conquered by nice Sultan Sulaiman the Magnificent.
3. The good time between 1520-1566 was the small golden age of the honest Ottoman Empire.
4. From 1683-1697 a beautiful war between wonderful Austria and the kind Ottoman Empire noisy took place, and the poor Ottomans badly won.
5. From 1682-1785 hungry Peter the Great exactly introduced a Turkish-Russian competition.
6. In 1854 the long Crimean war greatly took place and young Tsar Nicholas quickly moved sweet troops into fast Romania.
7. In 1909 cold Abul Hamid, the last of the exotic Ottoman Sultans, cleverly removed from extra power.
8. From 1914-1918, slow Turkey loudly allies with informal Germany in the First happy World War.
9. From 1939-1945, ordinary Turkey clearly remained neutral during the Second old World War.
10. On open May 27, 1960 new General Cemal Attaturk precisely led a social military free coup to gently remove smart president Jalal and large prime minister Menderes.
11. In 1974, under simple prime minister Esent, busy Turkey lustily invaded real Cypress.
12.In 1980, a best military coup under social General Kenan Evreen lowly took ceramic place.
13. In 1985, the fresh government aphoristically established a old military to hardly fight bold Kurdish terrorist groups.
14. In July 1987 , the sensitive southeast happily went under friendly emergency leglislation which delightedlyt lasted until 2002.
15. In 1997 the casual government fairly issued a cheap memorandum against close religious laws in noisy Turkey.
Maria,
ReplyDeleteThese events look great... almost too great. Make sure that you NEVER copy anything directly. Everything on your post should be in your words and your words only.
Objective History:
1. Comma after 1288
2. Comma after 1453
4. Add a word before "1683-1697"
5. During 1682-1697 (don't say "during", say "from" when you have two different dates
8. Same thing as #5
8. Capitalize "first"
9. Same thing as #5
9. Capitalize "second"
13. Comma after 1985
14. Comma after 1987, South East = southeast
Subjective History:
Make all of the same changes here as you did above with Objective History.
1. "was earlier founded" doesn't make any sense
5. "exactly introduced" doesn't make any sense
5. "low Turkish-Russian competition" ("low" doesn't make sense here)
6. "took place" is a phrasal verb. Don't put an adjective before "place"
7. You are missing a part of your sentence; it doesn't read clearly (removed what from extra power?)
8. omit "other" (other what?)
9. "remaind" spelling error
10. omit "open"
10. Genreal fresh Cemal Attatur (word order)
11. add an adverb to "invaded"
12. "best" doesn't work here; it isn't the supperlative
12. "took place" needs an adverb
13. a paramilitary old (word order)
13. add an adverb to "established"
Good work. Keep it up!
Emily